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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The table illustrates the
amount
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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 who visited
to
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five different countries
in
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every five years from 1990 to 2005. These data have
presented
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 in millions. It is obvious that the most
visitors
 have recorded in 2005. At the
begining
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beginning
 of data collection,
majority
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the majority
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 of
visitors
have
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selected Europe as their destination which was slightly more than 280. When reached in 2005 almost 400
visitors
 have been to Europe with a huge increase.
In addition
, the second favorite location was America except in 2005 because there was a slight reduction in
this
 year. Asia and the Pacific came up in 2005
although
 it had
a
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third place in 1990,1995 and 2000.
However
, America, Asia and the Pacific states have close numbers in
last
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the last
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 year
such
 as 113.2 and 135.8 respectively.
However
, the least amount of
travelers
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travellers
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 have chosen
Middle
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the Middle
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 East
in
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every year and that was just 9.8 in 1990.
Although
 it is,
the
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then
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the
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apply
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number of
visitors
have
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has
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 enhanced in all years
upto
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up to
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 15.8 in 2005. When studying
this
 table,
it is clear that
 almost all parts of the world
has
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 a huge increase of the
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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