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The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the rate of change in the
sales
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 of gold in Dubai in 2002.
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, it is clearly seen that the
sales
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 show a huge fluctuation every
month
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. Looking at the details, in the initial
month
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 the sale of gold is 200
million
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dirhams
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 which rise to 350
million
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dirhams
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 in the
month
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 of May. In April, the
sales
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 significantly decrease to 250
million
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dirhams
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 and keep on decreasing till the
month
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 of July 110
million
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dirhams
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. In August the
sales
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 increase to 200
million
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dirhams
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 and
then
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 dropped to 110 in September. In the
last
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 3
months
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 the
sales
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 slightly increased and reached 190
million
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dirhams
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, month, million, dirhams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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