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Many People Work Long Hours, Leaving Very Little Time For Leisure Activities

To be honest,
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
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 would prefer to work their
much
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time
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, Related to their field and for their act, It remains short
time
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. There are plus and minuses of both views. But, they
also
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 must
rest
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 without opting to work hard. Currently, many
people
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 want to go
their
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 working place and stay there long.
In addition
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, For
thier
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their
 extra
time
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 do not act much. There are some plus sides
of
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to
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 the initial idea.
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,
People
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 can get extra payment, if they come to their working place on a daily basis.
Secondly
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, The more working, The more their career increase. If they perform their function well,
people
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 will respect them.
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, for herself or himself, he or she can create
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magnificient
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magnificent
, new life by employing a lot.
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, Doctor Gulnoz do rules as always. Presently, her career
are
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is
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 grown considerably. Going back to the second opinion,
Although
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, For spare action, It is not paid, But, they are able to have
rest
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,
wih
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with
 getting
rest
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, they manage to
gether
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gather
get her
 strength. After
fulling
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filling
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 in
this
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, they cope with everything
according to
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 their job.
People
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 can not carry out
this
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 task, it affects
to
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their health.
Together with
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this
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, These things cause
to
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you to
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 have a headache or other types of
illnessess
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illnesses
.
Such
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 as, in
the
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big places, it is exampled working
people
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. They are working
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in bank
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bank
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banks
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, being
doctor
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doctors
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,
teacher
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teachers
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 and so on In conclusion, without free
time
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 or
have
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rest
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,
people
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 can not be healthy. So, as much as possible, they need to pick out spare
time
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 to perform activities

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