The diagram shows the small-scale production of smoked fish.

The diagram shows the small-scale production of smoked fish.
The diagram illustrates several steps of how the small-business manufacture of smoked
fish
is carried out.
It is clear that
there are 8 main stages involved in
this
process, beginning with the
fish
being prepared carefully and ending with the final products being delivered by trucks for sale. As can be seen, during the first stage,
fish
are washed throughout to be ready for the following process.
Next,
those are soaked in the mixture of water and salt for 30 minutes before being moved to the cooker in order to be boiled within 5 minutes. After that, they are taken out and let dry. Once dried, they are hung by wires in the vat which contains some materials used for smoking and
additionally
, a wooden cap is used to cover the vat.
This
procedure takes about half an hour to finish.
Subsequently
, the products are coloured yellow to look more mouth-watering before being packaged in boxes.
Finally
, those smoked
fish
are transported to the markets or supermarkets for sale.
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