The diagram shows the small-scale production of smoked fish.

The diagram illustrates several steps of how the small-business manufacture of smoked

fish

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is carried out.

It is clear that

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there are 8 main stages involved in

this

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process, beginning with the

fish

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being prepared carefully and ending with the final products being delivered by trucks for sale. As can be seen, during the first stage,

fish

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are washed throughout to be ready for the following process.

Next,

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those are soaked in the mixture of water and salt for 30 minutes before being moved to the cooker in order to be boiled within 5 minutes. After that, they are taken out and let dry. Once dried, they are hung by wires in the vat which contains some materials used for smoking and

additionally

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, a wooden cap is used to cover the vat.

This

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procedure takes about half an hour to finish.

Subsequently

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, the products are coloured yellow to look more mouth-watering before being packaged in boxes.

Finally

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, those smoked

fish

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are transported to the markets or supermarkets for sale.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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