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The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints from passengers.

The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints from passengers.
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The bar chart illustrates how well the bus
company
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 can perform in both the frequency of driving to a depot on time as the
target
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 giving and how many customers feel pleasant with the bus service on their journey between 1999 and 2003.
Overall
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, the
company
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 hardly reached the
target
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 through 4
years
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although
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 it reduced the percentage of aim for every 2
years
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, except 2003.
Moreover
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, it
also
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 received disappointment from customers, and the
number
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 of
complaints
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 grew in each period. In the first two
years
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, the percentage of objectives suggested high than it could do in reality, at 86%.
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 in the first
year
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 the buses recorded 85% nearly the aim, a sharply reduce of 3% was seen in the percentage of services arriving on time in 2000. The
company
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 witnessed the portion of the time that drivers could go exactly at approximately 85% in the following two
years
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.
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, the actual figures were still lower than expected about 1%. By 2003, the
company
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 could meet a better result which is higher than the
target
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 of about 0,5%. Turning to the
complaints
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number
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, it increased the awful experiments of passengers journeys
in
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each
year
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. There was a dramatic growth of 100 in the
number
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 of
complaints
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 in the first two
years
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. Even though the
number
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 of
complaints
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 reduced to nearly 90 in 2001, it pumped to 100 again in the next
year
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.
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 2003 could get over the
target
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, an increase of 20 was recorded in the
complaints
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in
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this
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year
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words company, target, years, number, complaints, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punctuality
  • target versus actual performance
  • correlation
  • consistency
  • trends
  • passenger numbers
  • complaints
  • assessment
  • measures taken
  • impact
  • effectiveness
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