The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
The diagram below
demonstrate
the manufacturing process with Change the verb form
demonstrates
sugar
cane for producing the Use synonyms
sugar
.
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Overall
, Linking Words
it is clear that
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manufacturing
Correct article usage
the manufacturing
sugar
process requires 7 difficult steps with the modern world's technology the tractors for cutting canes and addition by Use synonyms
the
human activities.In Correct article usage
apply
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additionally
, include crushing, filtering part and centrifuge.
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at
the first Change preposition
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stage
in the manufacturing movement Use synonyms
start
by harvesting a number of already for cutting 12 - 18 month grown canes and Correct subject-verb agreement
starts
this
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stage
can done Use synonyms
by
two Change preposition
in
way
: tractors and influencing human activity. Fix the agreement mistake
ways
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The next
stage
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producing
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of producing
this
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will be
sent to separating to Wrong verb form
being
state
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the state
a state
of
flour and it can be converted to Change preposition
apply
juice
.
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, the second step involves purifying the Linking Words
juice
and the Use synonyms
juice
passes through Use synonyms
limestone
filter.After Correct article usage
a limestone
that
the evaporator barrel filled with purified Add a comma
that,
juice
will be heated at Use synonyms
high
degree until becomes Correct article usage
a high
to
syrup.Change preposition
apply
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the centrifuge process can be done Linking Words
with
separating Change preposition
by
sugar
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to
crystals from syrup and Change preposition
into
the
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in the
last
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stage
the Use synonyms
sugar
will be sent for drying and cooling.Use synonyms
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