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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane
#process #sugar #cane
The diagram below
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 the manufacturing process with
sugar
 cane for producing the
sugar
.
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,
it is clear that
manufacturing
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sugar
 process requires 7 difficult steps with the modern world's technology the tractors for cutting canes and addition by
the
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human activities.In
additionally
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, include crushing, filtering part and centrifuge. On the one hand ,
at
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the first
stage
 in the manufacturing movement
start
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 by harvesting a number of already for cutting 12 - 18 month grown canes and
this
stage
 can done
by
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 two
way
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: tractors and influencing human activity.
Next
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The next
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stage
producing
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of producing
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this
 involves the cane
will be
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 sent to separating to
state
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of
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flour and it can be converted to
juice
.
On the other hand
 , the second step involves purifying the
juice
 and the
juice
 passes through
limestone
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 filter.After
that
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 the evaporator barrel filled with purified
juice
 will be heated at
high
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a high
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 degree until becomes
to
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syrup.
Then
 the centrifuge process can be done
with
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 separating
sugar
to
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into
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 crystals from syrup and
the
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last
stage
 the
sugar
 will be sent for drying and cooling.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, stage, juice with synonyms.
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