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Some people think that young people should follow traditional values. Discuss both views and opinion

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In recent epochs, Adolescents across the world wide start changing
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 with others.
However
,Others believe that youth should follow their culture.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal opinion.
To begin
 with ,There are several reasons for them to keep their identity because all countries have different identities which make them special.An eminent example is the language you can easily know where they are from .
In addition
, everyone ought to admire their traditions.
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