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Some expert believe that it is a better for children to begin learning of foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this out weigh the disadvantages.

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Learning a foreign
language
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 at
school
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 is a basic part of education. Some experts believe that it is better to start learning a foreign
language
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 in primary
school
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 rather than in secondary
school
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. We will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
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 approach, and
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 I will give my opinion about it. The
child
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's brain in elementary
school
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 works like a sponge, the
child
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 can quickly assimilate large amounts of information. Scientists have proved that a
child
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 can not learn until about +-10 years. It is at
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 age, a
child
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 can learn to speak without an accent and learn a foreign
language
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 as their own. In our time, children are overloaded with an abundance of information and additional load in the form of learning a foreign
language
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 can negatively affect the
overall
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 performance.
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 children with speech problems may experience additional difficulties with pronunciation. The beginning of
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 learning in middle
school
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 solves these problems. I believe that foreign
language
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 learning should be started as early as possible, but first making sure that the
child
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 does not have difficulties with his/her own
language
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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