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Nowadays, distance-learning have gained in popularity, but some people argue that courses can never be as good as those taken by attending a college or university in person.To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In modern human society, the majority of citizens share the same thought that possessing a
house
 or an apartment is an essential part of our daily lives. As, in my perspective, it yields more benefits to most people which will be discussed in the following essay.
Firstly
, if you own an accommodation, paying
rent
 monthly or annually won't be a concern for you anymore which will be an advantage as you can invest the saved
money
 from paying
rent
 to invest in important or unexpected matters.
For instance
, in 2019, the global pandemic Covid19 spread widely and lasted a couple of years which lead to a global economic depression.
Therefore
, VietNam was among many countries that were affected by the depression which caused numerous companies to be closed, it
also
 caused an uncountable amount of citizens to lose their jobs and several of them didn’t have enough
money
 to pay for
rent
 so they had to go back to their hometown to find other jobs.
Secondly
, without paying
rent
, you can save more
money
 to buy essential products for you or you can use
this
 to sign up for the lesson which is related to your career and
then
 you can improve your knowledge of your job so you are able to earn a high salary from your job.
Furthermore
, more
money
 can be spent on decorating your
house
 in the type you want without limited conditions
such
 as a rented
house
 or you can rebuild your
house
according to
 your ideas but with a rented
house
, you wouldn’t be able to do so. In conclusion, owning a
house
 will make you feel more comfortable because of the fact that you don’t need to worry about the
money
 you have to pay monthly or annually and it may be assistance for you to improve your quality of life as it can help you to save your
money
 efficiently
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