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Nowadays, distance-learning have gained in popularity, but some people argue that courses can never be as good as those taken by attending a college or university in person.To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In modern human society, the majority of citizens share the same thought that possessing a
house
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 or an apartment is an essential part of our daily lives. As, in my perspective, it yields more benefits to most people which will be discussed in the following essay.
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, if you own an accommodation, paying
rent
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 monthly or annually won't be a concern for you anymore which will be an advantage as you can invest the saved
money
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 from paying
rent
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 to invest in important or unexpected matters.
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, in 2019, the global pandemic
Covid19
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COVID-19
 spread widely and lasted a couple of years which
lead
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 to a global economic depression.
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, VietNam was among many countries that were affected by the depression which caused numerous companies to be closed, it
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 caused an uncountable amount of citizens to lose their jobs and several of them didn’t have enough
money
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 to pay for
rent
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 so they had to go back to their hometown to find other jobs.
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, without paying
rent
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, you can save more
money
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 to buy essential products for you or you can use
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 to sign up for the lesson which is related to your career and
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 you can improve your knowledge of your job so you are able to earn a high salary from your job.
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, more
money
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 can be spent on decorating your
house
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 in the type you want without limited conditions
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 as a rented
house
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 or you can rebuild your
house
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according to
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 your ideas but with a rented
house
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, you wouldn’t be able to do so. In conclusion, owning a
house
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 will make you feel more comfortable because of the fact that you don’t need to worry about the
money
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 you have to pay monthly or annually and it may be assistance for you to improve your quality of life as it can help you to save your
money
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 efficiently
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph is focused on one main idea and develops it fully. Try to relate each point back to the main topic to strengthen the argument.
task achievement
Make sure to address all aspects of the prompt clearly. Include a balanced discussion of both agreeing and disagreeing points to present a well-rounded argument.
task response
Good use of examples to support your points.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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