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The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows a neighborhood before and after a mall was constructed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram depicts a
neighborhood
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 through the previous and following points of construction of the mall.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
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 the west side of Main Street has completely been changed;
however
, houses located in the east did not undergo any
alterance
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altering
alternate
. To start with, in the
north west
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northwest
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 of the
road
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,road
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 some items
such
 as
,
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 woods, shoe store and book store
has
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 been demolished and replaced with a huge mall.
Secondly
,
park
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the park
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 and lake
situated
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are situated
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in
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 the
south west
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southwest
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 of
street
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the street
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while
 currently,
parking
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the parking
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 lot lies along to the south of
mall
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the mall
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.
Moreover
, the second parking lot
built
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was built
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 in the south of
main
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the main
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 road,
instead
 of two houses.
On the other hand
, the houses which run through the east side of Oak Street remained the same.
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