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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time.

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The blueprints depict how the ground floor of a specific building has altered
in
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over
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 time.
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, it can obviously be said that the kitchen and entrance of the building have not altered since 1958.
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, sometimes the number of
rooms
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of
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in
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 the building has a fluctuating trend by it using purpose across the timespan. The main using purpose of the building has changed three times:
office
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,
apartment
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,
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flower
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and flower
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shop
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, 1958-1984, 1958-2000, 2001-present, respectively.
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 the
office
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 version had 7
rooms
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, the
flower
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shop
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 has only 4
rooms
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. The
apartment
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 and
office
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 had a minimum
one
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of one
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 bathroom
while
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 the
flower
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shop
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 has not
a
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have a
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bathroom. The
Apartment
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 and
Office
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 had
a
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apply
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similar size of floor
although
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 the
flower
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shop
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 has a bigger floor than the others. The
apartment
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 and
office
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 had slightly different sizes of
rooms
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whereas
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 the
flower
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shop
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 has an equal size of room.
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