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As global trade increases between different countries, many daily necessities are produced in other countries. Such goods are usually transported a long distance. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh its drawbacks?

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As global
trade
 rise between several
nations
,
nemerous
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numerous
 daily necessities are produced in other
nations
. namely products are usually transported a long distance.
Although
this
trend
 can bring benefits namely,
allow
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allowing
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people
 to experience a wide range of
goods
 I believe the demerits of
this
trend
 outweigh the merits because
this
trend
 can create environmental issues and have a negative impact
in
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on
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 domestic
business
. On the one hand, the primary advantage for
increase
the
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apply
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global
trade
 between
countrieis
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countries
 is
allow
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allowing
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people
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to
experiecnce
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experience
 a wide range of products.
For example
 ,
people
 can purchase food or
goods
 from different countries namely, Africa, Europe, and America, which
mean
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means
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people
 will have many
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choose
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chooses
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 regard their
goods
.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
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increasing
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increase
the
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global
trade
 between
countrieis
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countries
 will contribute to
make
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making
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 the market more competitive.
Consequently
, every commercial company will compete to provide high-quality and affordable
goods
 in order to attract more customers.
On the other hand
, I would like to argue
downsides
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 of
increase
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increasing
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the
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global
trade
 between
nations
significantly
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are significantly
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 more than
benefits
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the benefits
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. The primary downside of
increase
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increasing
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the
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global
trade
 between
nations
 is can create environmental problems. To illustrate, transported products for a long distance can
increase
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air pollution.
This
 is because the most of
goods
shipped
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are shipped
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 using
flight
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flights
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 or ships, which these forms of transport use fossil fuel.
Dissappear
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The dissappear
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 of local
business
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businesses
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 is another disadvantage of
gorwing
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growing
 global
trad
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trade
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.
This
 is
due to
 the fact that the local
business
 will face challenges to compete with global companies.
Therefore
, many local
business
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businesses
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 will close, which
this
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can have
a
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detrimenal
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detrimental
consequences on
local
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the local
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 economy of
country
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the country
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.
To sum up
,
Although
this
trend
 can bring upsides namely,
allow
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allowing
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 individuals to experience a wide range of
goods
 in my opinion the drawbacks of
this
trend
 outweigh the disadvantage because
this
trend
 can contribute to environmental degradation and have a adverse impact
in
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on
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 domestic
business
.
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