Now-a-days people use social media to keep in touch with others and be aware of the news. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Everybody knows that social media is very important in our life and it is common so much. We can use it for communication, business or following some news or famous celebrities. Some people want to keep in touch with each other. İt is sometimes good , and other times it is bad for us owing to some specific results. first and foremost, you are able to meet some friends on social websites and you can
spend
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a funny time together because we don't have much time to go outside we can sit at home and we can meet others if you want to speak about cultures or relationships whatever you want, you can talk for everything.
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, many people
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new friends and
then
get married. You can find your partner on the internet, and you are able to know how is the person's character. İt shows us that it is beneficial for us.
On the other hand
, it has many different communities unfortunately some of them are bad. Cheating on social media is very comfortable and you can't understand if they are
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true
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the truth
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or
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. you need to be careful so much you can find very bad people.
for example
, one day a girl met a man on a communication application, they began the relationship and she loves him. They
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a decision to see each other. she went to the meeting place and was shocked because he was not similar to his profile photo. she understood that he used other
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pictures and she went away quickly and felt bad.
This
example shows us if we use social media we have to be careful.
to sum up
, the internet is very common in our life, We need it and we should use it because it makes our life easier.
However
, we should be careful , especially for children. it is dangerous and no need to it until the age of 18.
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task response
The essay should provide a more balanced discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of using social media. This will help in presenting a well-developed argument.
coherence cohesion
The introduction lacks a clear thesis statement, and the conclusion does not effectively summarize the main points discussed. Additionally, there are some issues with logical progression and organization within paragraphs.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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