A year ago, you lent your favourite book to a friend who you thought would enjoy it. Unfortunately, your friend has forgotten to return it. The book has sentimental value to you as it had been presented by your grandmother. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: ask how he or she is doing remind him / her about the book explain why you need it back

Dear Jansen, How are you? I hope you are doing well. Do you still
lives
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in Medan? If yes, why don't we
hangout
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together and
talking
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about what are you doing now
?.
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I writing
this
letter because I would like to let you know about the
book
you borrow from me
last
year
on
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May. After we're back from
gym
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, we're taking rest at my place
also
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and also
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playing
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video games until night. It's a lot of
enjoyness
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enjoyment
and noises we made.
In
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the end of playing video games, we read some of my books and you want to borrow one. The
book
you borrow is
tittled
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titled
"The Beautiful Night" which
written
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by Jonathan
also
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covered with
mixtured
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mixture
mixtures
colour
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of blue and black. You say will return the
book
in 2 weeks, but until now you haven't
return
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it. I had already informed
about
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the
book
you borrowed, but you always said that you forgot. The
book
I lent is so
memmorable
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memorable
and precious because it was presented by my grandmother
since
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when
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I am 10-year-old. I would like you to return it because the
book
you borrowed already pass 1 year. Regards, William
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