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The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph informs about the
age
 of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. The
data
 is given about
age
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ages
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from
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0 to 65 and above.
Firstly
, in the
year
 1990, in
age
 between 25-54 was less compared to other years with 50%.
Age
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 between 0-14 there was more than 10% ,
15
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for 15
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-24 it was more than 20%,
55
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for 55
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-64 it was 11% and
65
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for 65
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 and above it was 27%.
Secondly
, in 2000, in
age
 between 15-24 was
near by
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nearby
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 20%.
Thirdly
,
2010
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in 2010
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, in
age
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ages
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 0-14 there was more than 20%. In the
year
 2020,
in
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age
 65 and above was less than 20%. In conclusion,
from
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the above
data
 shows that
in
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every
year
 more number people
was
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were
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 in
age
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the age
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 group 25-54 and less in 65 and above. The lowest was in
year
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the year
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 2020 in
age
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the age
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 group 15-24. The above
data
 describe
about
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apply
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the Iceland population. The information from 1990 to 2020 is
discribe
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described
describe
 in
above
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the above
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data
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, data, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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