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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems to increase the costs of fuels. Do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #costs #fuels
There is no denying the fact that our globe, nowadays, has been facing severe issues because of
excessive
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 use of
fuels
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fuel
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 in our daily lives. It is argued that increasing the prices on the purchase of these products may prove helpful to cure
this
 cause,
however
, I believe in other direction, as skyrocketing the costs may not be the only solution.
First
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 and foremost reason behind
over consumption
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overconsumption
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 of various fuels is not its cheaper prices,
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but instead
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,
increase
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the increase
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of
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 population at an
alaring
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alarming
 rate on a daily basis.
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, a few
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western countries have tried tackling
this
 issue, but, poor and developing nations have been
amongst
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 the major population producer during
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 few decades. A study carried out by
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Oxford
Universty
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University
,
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 has
also
 shown concerns
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impacts
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the impacts
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 of excessive growth in the number of people, resulting in the
depleting
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 of resources more swiftly, as
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 the population higher the consumption. Another reason
of
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 the cause is
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