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Some students take a gap year after graduating high school to work and/or travel. Discus the advantages and disadvantages.

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It is often argued that some
students
 after finishing high school, prefer to
work
 or travel for one year,
instead
 of going directly to
universities
 to complete their education.
This
 essay will discuss the pros and cons of
this
 notion. At the outset, some benefits will be obtained if the
students
work
 before going to university
Consequently
, they will have enough
money
 to cover all expenses of their studies and earn
money
 which enables them to apply for university.
For example
, in Canada and Australia, the fees of
universities
 are expensive, so; youth prefer working for a certain period to save the required
money
, which they will need during their studies.
In addition
 to that, they will live independently, and their self-confidence will increase.
Furthermore
, their critical thinking will develop quickly, so; they can solve any problem independently. Even though some
students
 get some advantages from their
work
 for one year before entering college, they might experience some negative effects.
Firstly
, their graduation from
universities
 will be postponed for a year compared to their colleagues of the same age.
Secondly
, some of them prefer to continue working in place of going to
universities
 because they have a desire to earn
money
 rather than studying,
hence
; they will be deprived of getting any university degree.
Thirdly
, if there is any
work
 problem, it will affect them psychologically, and
this
 problem may act as an obstacle for them to complete their study. In conclusion,
although
students
 who
work
 before studying in institutes obtain some pros as we mentioned, there are some negative consequences, so; the candidates should be aware of them, and they should make a plan to avoid all of these issues.
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