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Some students take a gap year after graduating high school to work and/or travel. Discus the advantages and disadvantages.

#students #gap #year #school #work #travel #discus
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It is often argued that some
students
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 after finishing high school, prefer to
work
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 or travel for one year,
instead
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 of going directly to
universities
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 to complete their education.
This
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 essay will discuss the pros and cons of
this
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 notion. At the outset, some benefits will be obtained if the
students
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work
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 before going to university
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, they will have enough
money
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 to cover all expenses of their studies and earn
money
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 which enables them to apply for university.
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, in Canada and Australia, the fees of
universities
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 are expensive, so; youth prefer working for a certain period to save the required
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, which they will need during their studies.
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 to that, they will live independently, and their self-confidence will increase.
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, their critical thinking will develop quickly, so; they can solve any problem independently. Even though some
students
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 get some advantages from their
work
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 for one year before entering college, they might experience some negative effects.
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, their graduation from
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 will be postponed for a year compared to their colleagues of the same age.
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, some of them prefer to continue working in place of going to
universities
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 because they have a desire to earn
money
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 rather than studying,
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; they will be deprived of getting any university degree.
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, if there is any
work
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 problem, it will affect them psychologically, and
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 problem may act as an obstacle for them to complete their study. In conclusion,
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students
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 who
work
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 before studying in institutes obtain some pros as we mentioned, there are some negative consequences, so; the candidates should be aware of them, and they should make a plan to avoid all of these issues.
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