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In the 20th century, contact between many different parts of the world developed rapidly through telecommunication and air travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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During the
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 two decades, the better accessibility of
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travel
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 and the development of telecommunication have permitted
people
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 to be in contact with other parts of the
world
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.
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 phenomenon has positive and negative outcomes. In
this
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 essay, I will explain some of them and outline my opinion about them. On one hand, the globalization produced by the development of telecommunication and
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travel
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 has helped
people
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 to open their minds and have a better understanding of the human condition around the
world
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.
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 phenomenon is key because only by understanding better what is going on around the planet it is possible to act properly.
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, knowing
people
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 from Northern countries where the attention to the ambience is really developed, I truly understand how I was uneducated in
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 vital field of life the result that I decided to change it.
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, a lot of
people
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 often used to
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 only to show their wealthy lifestyle and
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 tendency does not help the planet at all. As a matter of fact, recent studies affirmed that
air
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 travels produce more than 2% of
air
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 pollution.
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, sometimes would be better to decide to
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 by train in order to produce less contamination. In conclusion, the development of contact between many different parts of the
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 helps
people
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 to be more open-minded and sometimes better educated.
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, the tendency to
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 a lot by plane creates a lot of
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 pollution. In my opinion, it is important to try to
travel
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 and use telecommunication to discover the
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 and become more open-minded without forgetting
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respect
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 the earth's pollution.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • facilitated
  • fostering
  • international relations
  • cultural exchange
  • innovations
  • accessibility
  • boosted
  • contributing
  • economy
  • job opportunities
  • environmental degradation
  • carbon emissions
  • digital divide
  • over-dependence
  • diminish
  • face-to-face interactions
  • physical presence
  • disconnection
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