The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of annual earnings in
dollars
of three bakeries marked in different colours from 2000 to 2010 in Calgary.
Overall
, it can be argued that Amandine Bakery is the one that increased more consistently its income
, while
Mary Bakeshop is the bakery that has had the worst decrease.
Focusing more on details, Amandine Bakery started in 2000 with a yearly income
of almost 60 thousand
dollars
, it maintained this
for 5 years and then
started to increase steadily reaching better growth in 2007 when it reached almost 100 thousand
dollars
of yearly income
. Mary Bakeshop started with almost 80 thousand
dollars
of yearly income
and had a plummet in 2004 when it decreased its income
to 30 thousand
dollars
finishing in 2010 with a yearly income
of 40 thousand
dollars
. Finally
, Bolo Cakery had tripled its income
during the range studied passing from almost 20 thousand
dollars
to 60 thousand
dollars
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, income, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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