The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows the number of annual earnings in
dollars
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of three bakeries marked in different colours from 2000 to 2010 in Calgary.
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, it can be argued that Amandine Bakery is the one that increased more consistently its
income
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,
while
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Mary Bakeshop is the bakery that has had the worst decrease. Focusing more on details, Amandine Bakery started in 2000 with a yearly
income
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of almost 60
thousand
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dollars
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, it maintained
this
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for 5 years and
then
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started to increase steadily reaching better growth in 2007 when it reached almost 100
thousand
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dollars
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of yearly
income
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. Mary Bakeshop started with almost 80
thousand
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dollars
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of yearly
income
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and had a plummet in 2004 when it decreased its
income
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to 30
thousand
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dollars
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finishing in 2010 with a yearly
income
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of 40
thousand
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dollars
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.
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, Bolo Cakery had tripled its
income
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during the range studied passing from almost 20
thousand
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dollars
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to 60
thousand
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dollars
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, income, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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