The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the number of annual earnings in
dollars
of three bakeries marked in different colours from 2000 to 2010 in Calgary.
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Overall
, it can be argued that Amandine Bakery is the one that increased more consistently its Linking Words
income
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while
Mary Bakeshop is the bakery that has had the worst decrease.
Focusing more on details, Amandine Bakery started in 2000 with a yearly Linking Words
income
of almost 60 Use synonyms
thousand
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dollars
, it maintained Use synonyms
this
for 5 years and Linking Words
then
started to increase steadily reaching better growth in 2007 when it reached almost 100 Linking Words
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of yearly Use synonyms
income
. Mary Bakeshop started with almost 80 Use synonyms
thousand
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dollars
of yearly Use synonyms
income
and had a plummet in 2004 when it decreased its Use synonyms
income
to 30 Use synonyms
thousand
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dollars
finishing in 2010 with a yearly Use synonyms
income
of 40 Use synonyms
thousand
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dollars
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Finally
, Bolo Cakery had tripled its Linking Words
income
during the range studied passing from almost 20 Use synonyms
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dollars
to 60 Use synonyms
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, income, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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