The charts below show ưhat UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

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The bar charts above analyze the choices of English students in 2008 who graduated or postgraduated, other than entering in a full-time working position.

In particular

, the survey focuses on four possible outcomes: part-time work, voluntary work,

further

study and unemployment. As the data provide, voluntary work is the less attractive choice for both

graduates

and

postgraduates

, with only 345 of the formers choosing volunteering,

as well as

only 35000 of the latters.

Whereas

, the first pick for both groups is to

further

develop their studies: looking at the numbers, 2725

graduates

decide to enroll in other study programs, as 29665

postgraduates

do. The second best-choice is a part-time job, even though it attracts more

graduates

than

postgraduates

in comparison. As a matter of fact, the amount of

postgraduates

selecting a part-time job is just slightly above the amount of unemployed ones, with a difference of just 1000 people. The same scenario presents itself for

graduates

as well, with just a 1000 difference between part-times and unemployed people.

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The charts below show ưhat UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008

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