Some people believe that children should be made disciplined by making them obey rules and do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Others, however, believe that those children who are controlled are not well-prepared to tackle the challenges life brings to them. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Children are the future of the nation and future
parents
. It is a debatable topic where one side supports the notion of obedience
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rules
and
regulations
made by their
parents
and teachers in order to keep them disciplined;
nevertheless
,
others
consider
this
idea irrelevant as
this
sort of behaviour does not keep them ready to tackle challenges. Both conceptions,
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along with
the conclusion
at the end
,
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in the forthcoming paragraphs. There are various positive virtues that
the
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teenagers are enriched with when they obey their
parents
and mentors and one of those traits is
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ability to behave with
others
in
professional
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and personal environment.
In addition
to
this
, the
adolecents
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adolescents
are filled with distinct soft skills that not only make them
centre
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of attraction
,
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but
also
stimulate them to get promoted in different fields. To cite an example, if a student at school obeys the norms imposed by the principal when he studies in high school, and
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and
regulations
at
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, he becomes a rising star in the eyes of teachers when he plays a game like football at the school level at first and later at state, national-level, and international level enriching with leadership, teamwork, and more.
Therefore
, obeying elders' orders
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them
goods
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citizens. The
parents
who impose strict
rules
and keep them under severe surveillance, the minors become introverts who cannot express their feelings
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others
when they find difficulty in their life;
this
sort of behaviour provoke them to have phobia
such
as stage fear. Apart from that other soft skills are not
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within them
due to
their
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kind of nature.
For instance
, if the
parents
impose strict norms
such
as do not go outside and do not play games with
others
, these
regulations
make the children introverts who cannot mingle with
others
, cannot speak
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stage in front of large
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, lack teamwork and leadership skills, and more.
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,
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adolescents ruin their life becoming prone to depression. In
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conclusion,
although
it is essential to impose
rules
and
regulations
on
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minors, the adverse consequences of their severe impositions cannot be neglected.
Thus
, both
parents
and guides should step forward to grasp the nettle of strict
rules
at homes and educational institutes.
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