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The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words.
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Presented table illustrates economic, demographic and social indicators. Information is presented regarding 4 counrries with different levels of social-econimic development:
Canada
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,
Japan
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,
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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. The first indicators inderectly reflects economic situation and demonstrates amount of annual income per capita. As it can be seen
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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 takes the lowest positions there and shows income less than 200$, 160$ and 130$ respectively. On the contarary,
Japan
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 and
Canada
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, logically, are "pure leaders": income per year is 11100$ - in
Canada
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, and 15600$ - in
Japan
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. What makes
Japan
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 one of the wealthiest country in the presented table. The next indicator, life expectancy at birth, can be proof of previous conclusion about a level of life in these countries: people can live much longer in in
Japan
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 (78 y.),
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 in
Canada
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 it is
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 high (76 y.), and 51 y. and 47 y. in
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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. As for diets and amount of intaken calories, it's clear that
Canada
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 and
Japan
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 haven't any problem with its supply, thorght it can be suggested that
Canada
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 can have some issues with obesity (3326 kcal.). But the
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 2 countries, it seems, has opposite picture:
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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 can have some problems in term of calories deficit. And the
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 one is adult literacy rate (%).
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 indicator almost raeches its maximum, 99% in both
Canada
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 and
Japan
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. But it has catastrophically small values in
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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, 68% and 34% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, japan, peru, zaire with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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