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In their advertising, business nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in someway. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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 part of selling, businesses become
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 how to promote their products. It could have
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 positive as a negative impact on the global commerce system. Through
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 market and local businesses in any
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. Nowadays, when customers already know what they potentially could buy from the market
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, lots of manufacturers, especially if there are just started their own business or have small non-competitive production couldn’t be spotlighted by the customers.
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 why a changing promotion strategy by introducing new products some kind
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unique or unrepeated
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plays
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 role or selling. I should say that meanwhile,
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 people usually don’t know what they want to buy and what they needed.
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 of
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 variety of advertising somehow helps people and potential customers understand what they really wanted.
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