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many people fail to achieve a balance between work and the other parts of life. What causes the situation? how to overcome this problem?

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In the modern era,
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individuals are trying to keep a balance between
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 personal and professional life but,
most
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 of them can not maintain it.
This
 essay will investigate the possible reasons and provide the solutions
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this
 issue followed by a conclusion. There are numerous factors causing
imbalance
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 between
work
 and personal life. First and foremost, finance is the major reason. People want to earn
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 amount of money from their job so that, they can make their life luxurious.
Hence
, they
work
 longer hours leading to
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 of personal
time
.
Secondly
, some individuals do not have
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 social circle.
As a result
, they feel
loneliness
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 and choose
work
 as an option to spend their leisure
time
.
Therefore
, they become addicted to working and spending most of their
time
 at
workplace
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 rather than enjoying it with friends or family.
Nevertheless
,
this
 issue can be solved by following various methods. For those people, who want to keep pace with all the luxury of the world, they can search for more job opportunities with better packages.
Thus
, they will not
work
 for extra hours when they are earning the same amount in
short
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 period. By doing
this
, they can utilize the saved
time
 for personal activities like gym, family, and
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hobbies. Another method is to be more socialized. When a person has more friends, he does not feel alone and wants to enjoy with them.
Consequently
, always thinks about managing the
time
 for friends and
work
.
To conclude
, no doubt
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 people in
this
 materialistic world are focusing more on money
instead
 of other sectors of their lives but still
this
 balance can be maintained by adapting to optional approaches.
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