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the top priority of business is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#priority #business #money #responsibilities
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Corporation's
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 main task is to generate profits,
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,
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public responsibilities aren't necessary. Personally, I agree that a
company
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's contribution goes
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beyond
 its ability to make money. On the one hand, it is crucial for a
irm
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firm
 to concentrate on
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 profits to survive in a competitive environment. It seems logical that many companies put a high priority on
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 profit
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 since they have to cover the staff's salaries and the overheads. For
more
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 ambitious one, they
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 have to expand the business by investing in the infrastructure and innovations. If a
company
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 can't afford these
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criteria
, we can't really blame them for having no interest in taking responsibility for
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society.
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,
sorporations
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corporations
 should spare their attention not only on growing business, but
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 on the effects it can make
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 their nation. One of them is
create
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 job
oppotunities
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opportunities
 so graduated students can find a job easier. It is well-known that companies should take care of the employees to get
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loyalty and determination in work.
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, any worker will be relieved if they know that their
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job
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 is sustainable or the insurance is adequate if anything bad happens. I
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 agree that an amount of budget
ahould
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should
 be spent
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to support
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charities, schools and
environment
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the environment
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. In
this
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 way,
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they
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also
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 improve the
company
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's image and have a good impression on the customers. If they just start a business, the
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best
 they can do is make sure to pay taxes on time. In conclusion, a firm should focus on
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making
 money to run the
company
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 smoothly.
Simutaneously
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Simultaneously
, they
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should
 put more effort to bear
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social responsibilities as they do with their financial objectives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Profitability
  • Ethical practices
  • Economic growth
  • Brand image
  • Consumer backlash
  • Long-term success
  • Sustainability
  • Ethical labor practices
  • Community involvement
  • Legal requirements
  • Compliance policies
  • Innovation
  • Stakeholders
  • Social welfare
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