the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories

the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories
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The given chart displays the total minutes in billion of telephone calls in the UK. There are three types of calls.
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, in local- fixed line, in 1995 there were approximately 70, in 1996 there were less than 80, in 1997 there were 85, in 1998 and 1999 there were 90, in 2000 there were more than 80, in 2001 there were less than 80 and in 2002 there was around 70.
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, in national and international- fixed line, in 1995 there was less than 40, in 1996 there was more than 40, in 1997 there was nearly 45, in 1998 there was less than 50, in 2000 there was higher compared to 1998 and in 2001 and 2002 there was 60.
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, in mobiles (all calls), in 1995 around 1, in 1996 it was nearly 5, in 1997 it was less than 10, in 1998 it was nearby 10, in 1999 it was more than 10, in 2000 it more than by 25, in 2001 it again increase by 39 and 2002 it was 45. In conclusion, In the local -fixed line from 1995 to ,2002 it was increasing and decreased. In National and international-fixed boundaries and mobiles it was increasing from 1995 to 2002. The above information describes table data.
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