Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The
advertisement
is the topic of discussion.
Although
some think
people
do not pay attention to Ads any more, myself included, believe that the community like to purchase everything by caring about the advertising process. The first reason is about awareness
due to
living in a busy and fast world that that nations have no time to get information about products or other things individual
instead
advertisement
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advertisements
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make it easy.
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, a mother who works all day and
need
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to
doing
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household chores and
taking
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care of children, the time
spend
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on TV or social media and scrolling down different Ads can help her to buy the thing she wants. So, advertising can increase the awareness of what
people
need to buy.
Moreover
, the second one is about the
effect
because the companies make an
advertisement
which can have an
effect
on society.
For instance
, a pot
which
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is
showed
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in
advertisement
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an advertisement
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between a break of serial and they show it as a magical pot and have a lot of options.
Hence
, the way the
advertisement
released
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can have
effect
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an effect
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on everything. Some may argue that
advertisement
is routine and no one
care
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about it because they think
people
do not trust it and so many of them are fraud.
However
,
people
can trust
on
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an advertisement
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advertisement
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advertisements
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that
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published
under
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government
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.
Moreover
, by letting know
the
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fraud in
community
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the community
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there is not
any
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problem. In conclusion, I believe that advertising is a way to push others
buy
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stuff
due to
two reasons, one is awareness and
other
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is the
effect
.
Furthermore
, some
people
have the opposite idea which is not caring about Ads
due to
reasons which is not reasonable to me.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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