Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Undoubtedly, the advancement of technology around the globe has become a phenomenon

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reliance on ourselves, rather than

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on someone else.

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some individual's belief of the modern world is putting us in conditional others.

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essay will examine both of the prospects of

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argument.

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with, the current generation has evolved into the modern phase, and so enhancement in smart devices is doing the majority of the work.

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, in comparison to the previous decades

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had shown transparency, but they

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had to rely on many factors.

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, basic amenities and needs

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by everyone, not only

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has created a negative effect but

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they had to maintain their relation

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, the 21st century and its labour-saving devices are ought to profound in every single human need.

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as, corporate employees can now share their insights and projects directly with their boss via email, which

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made

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field more effective and seamless.

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, some believe to have uncertainties in the modernised world, which

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us to rely on someone.

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, somewhere the ideology of an argument can differ in technology, yet we are

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shrugged into the infrastructure of technological development.

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, human needs have plunged into smart devices, neither we can minimise our usage nor we can replace it with similar intelligence.

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, we in the present day have to depend on something or someone, even though it is not a living thing.

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, every individual has their own viewpoint and strength about how many days they survive without anyone’s help. In my opinion, a “friend in need is a friend indeed” where depending on other's needs is not a mishap in

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globe, but having independence in every aspect is excellent.