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Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular. Discuss the impact of it on the environment and on people who lost their jobs because of it.

#impact #environment #people #jobs
These days everything is
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 .online shopping became more popular.
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people and nature. In
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 I will discuss
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it. The advantage of online shopping is it is available
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any time and place.
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your
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 time.
Indition
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 it is easy to deal with it by phone or computer.
ALSO
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,When you go
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shopping directly by
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car you will waste your money
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Although
 it has advantages
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 disadvantages of it.The first one is maybe the
stuff
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staff
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 lose their work.
Also
,when you buy
for example
 shoes maybe not
suitable
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 cause
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online shopping
not
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 like
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traditional shopping.
To sum up
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Every thing
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has advantages and disadvantages. I think the advantage of online shopping is more than
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 disadvantage of it.

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