The top priority of businesses is making money, and they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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There is an argument about businesses and their top priority, it
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making
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so that they do not need to have any responsibilities toward
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. I completely disagree with the
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perception is somewhat justifiable. But with
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I will show why I oppose
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opinion. On the one hand, businesses create to make
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. even
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how to trade, which is
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earlier form of
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. Scientists do have
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in their research with
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that show in their natural behaviour. It
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true that most of us think that the only thing that
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can capable to bring to us is
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. Because we usually do not have interest in any other aspect of a
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than the ability to produce income.
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, there
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a host of compelling
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as to
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why I
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in
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the idea that
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a business
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top priority is producing cash. I believe that
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a large part
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system, it provided jobs and careers where it
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for
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workforce and foreign labour,
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the local economy. In order to use the
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resource it
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to pay back the nation, in the form of jobs provider, taxes and
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way including charities and donations. The bigger the
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become the larger
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social responsibilities it
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to handle to continue to
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operate
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that I doubt the
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society will leave it alone and to do that they need some reputation which
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alot
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attendance
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event. In
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, the opinion said that
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business
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only
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to make
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have a reason to be that way.
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, it
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can be seen clearly
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business
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have
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to interfere
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society. So it cannot be said that they just to
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money
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • profit maximization
  • economic development
  • Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR)
  • shareholders
  • moral obligation
  • reputation
  • customer loyalty
  • sustainable business models
  • accountability
  • ethical practices
  • regulations
  • consumer expectations
  • economic sustainability
  • stakeholders
  • social impact
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