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Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular. Discuss the impact of it on the environment and on people who lost their jobs because of it.

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This
 present era extremely changing day by day because technology upgraded
as well as
this
 affected
individuals
' lifestyles
However
, online shopping is the most popular in the modern era. So,
This
 essay discusses which bad impact on the environment and
also
 on
individuals
' jobs. Let's begin with,
First,
Individuals
 are getting very busy in their life
due to
 their job or business and many personal reasons
Although
, when they are free on weekends so they like to spend their time with their families and loved ones and felt tired after work so they did not like to shopping by stores and shops.
Therefore
,
Individuals
 prefer shopping online mode
while
 they order essays in one click,
Moreover
, They have a number of variety available on websites and very affordable rates
as well as
 they save suspicious time.
For instance
, People are facing obesity problems because they do not go to market.
Secondly
, Now numerous websites are available on the Internet for shopping
such
 as Amazon, eBay, and Flipkart these companies deliver their products very safely to their customers that's why these companies used huge boxes and carry bags used for packing goods.
while
, cargoes parcel
also
 delivered by courier to customer's houses and whole courier companies
such
 as DHL, and Firefox, these are use trucks, cars, and plains for transportation.
For example
, Governments clear all garbage of waste of packaging and
according to
 past years from 2010 to 2020 huge used petroleum for transportation, It was increased by 40%.
However
, Delivery transportation created a lot of rusk on roads.
Additionally
, It is a bad effect on the environment and pollution in the air.
On the other hand
, During online shopping, People are suffering from unemployment as far as malls and shops vendor gets lost in business they prefer to sell online, So, they were not able to pay salaries to their employees So what,
individuals
 and youngster unemployed and bad impact on our economy. In conclusion, Not only whole people like to go shopping online
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while
, a plethora of
individuals
 like to go shopping in markets and stores because of their physical presence shopping.
overall
, there number of benefits of online shopping.
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