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The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts show how the proportion of expenses by students at one university was changed from 2000 to 2010,giving the percentage spent on seven different
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 of its operation. By far the most significant outlay in
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both years was food and drink ,at
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 held approximately
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the
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overall
 expenditure.The next important part of
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 is utilities,which increased from 21% in 2000 to 27%
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 2010.
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 changes across the decade in the proportion of spending in other areas.One of the most noteworthy
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 was in the portion spent on clothing , it was more than halved, from 16% in 2000 to 5% in 2010. Disbursement
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 and sports and
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 remained unchanged(5% and 17% respectively ).Other areas which saw a growth in percentage terms were Transport(from 8% to 9%) and Eating out,which ,though it started from the lowest base (4%)
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doubled and reached 8%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion of expenditure
  • Revenue
  • Categories
  • Significant changes
  • Spending habits
  • Relatively stable
  • Inflation
  • Lifestyle
  • Investments
  • Academic materials
  • Entertainment
  • Accommodation
  • Utilities
  • Food
  • Transportation
  • Miscellaneous expenses
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