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The top prioty of business is making money and they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#prioty #business #money #responsibilities
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expenditure
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 spent on books in four countries include Germany, France, Italy and Australia from 1995 to 2005. The unit is measured in
dollars
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, it can be seen that there was an increase in the amount of money spent on books in four countries. Australia had the highest increase,
while
 Germany showed the highest figure throughout the period.
Firstly
, Germany
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started
 at 80
million
dollars
 before increasing
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 90
dollars
 in 1999 and reached a peak of over 90
million
dollars
 in 2005.Turning to Italy, the amount of money spent on books
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started
 at 50
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dollars
then
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 increased
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 around 62
million
dollars
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 2005. Meanwhile, Australia increased gradually to 40
million
dollars
 before increasing significantly to over 70
million
dollars
 in 2005.The figure for France
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started
 at significant to over 70
million
dollars
 in 2005.The figure for France started at approximately 55
million
dollars
 before it increased to over 70
million
dollars
 in 2005.
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