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The flow chart shows 'trampling', the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside for the environment.

The flow chart shows 'trampling', the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside for the environment.
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Given flow chart provide information about how tourists are destroying our environment by trampling.
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, the trampling process has a significant impact on two components of
environment
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the environment
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 which is vegetation
damaging
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damage
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 and
soil
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 compacting.
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 with, damaged greenery leads to
variety
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a variety
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 of consequences.
In
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result
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 of
this
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 plants become weaker and are not able to reproduce and grow.
Consequently
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, plants are reducing faster. When it comes to
soil
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 compacting,
due to
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 becoming hard underfoot air and water hardly can penetrate into the ground, which leads to Its reduction.
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, it
also
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 affects the ability of plants to grow and multiply. Low water and air content in the
soil
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is
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 causing erosion increasing, and,
moreover
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, water is running off the land, what
additionally
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 is causing the greenery
reduce
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to reduce
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.
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, both decreasing vegetation and
water’s
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water
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 running off the land are the reason
of
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for
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 numerous erosions and decreased quality of
soil
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 and vegetation.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words soil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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