the line graph below show the income of graduates student with different age in 2002 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the line graph below show the income of graduates student with different age in 2002 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The supplied line graph provides information regarding 18-25 years old
students
(illustrated by
percentage
)in different countries.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Thailand's
students
led the way in the covered period by the graph. It is lucid that the number of Thai and Singaporean graduates stood at 15 and 25 per cent, respectively. In the following years,
although
the ratio of Thai
students
decreased gradually ( around 22%), Singaporean
students
increased sharply and reached 30% in 1971. From 1971 to 2011, the
percentage
of Singaporean
students
experienced considerable fluctuations and reached 40% by the end of the period.
However
, Thai
students
after 1991 their
percentage
increased sharply and reached an all-time high of above 40% by 2001. Regarding Malaysian and Philippine
students
,
although
the
percentage
of Malaysian
students
stood at around 3% by 1961,
it is clear that
this
bonus increased steadily and reached below 20 per cent by 2011.
On the other hand
, the
percentage
of
Philippian's
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Philippian
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students
remained stable from 1991 to 2011 at 15 per cent.
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