The graph below shows the participation of Australian children in sports outside school hours in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
supllied
illustration of Correct your spelling
supplied
bar
graph demonstrates information about Correct article usage
the bar
attendance
of Australian Add an article
the attendance
puple
in Correct your spelling
pupils
sport
clubs in their leisure time in 2014.
Change the noun form
sports
Overall
, it is obvious that the most popular sport among boys
was football, whereas
girls
were really keen on netball games.
It is interesting to note that swimming was widespread for both gender
and Change to a plural noun
genders
thay
almost had no differences in Correct your spelling
they
participation
rate, Add an article
the participation
Add an article
the boys
boys
attendance rate was nearly 14 and Change noun form
boys'
boy's
girls
a little more than 15. Change noun form
girls'
girl's
Moreover
, it is worth considering that football being the most favoured among the boys
and having 20 participants, was the most non-distributed for opposite
gender. Netball had the same situation, Add an article
the opposite
however
it was mostly in favour of Add a comma
,however
girls
with attendants just
about 20 people and most disliked for Change preposition
of just
boys
with participants less than 5. Next,
basketball was popular bor
both genders on the same level with Correct your spelling
for
difference
just for one or two people. Fix the agreement mistake
differences
Furthermore
, neither girls
for 5 students nor boys
a
little less than 5 haven't been attending Change preposition
for a
in
any sports.Change preposition
apply
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