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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed , rather than to work from a company or organisation. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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 the view that being fully autonomous in
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private
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 is fairly more secure and comfortable.
This
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. To embark, the main reasons for the widespread
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timing flexibility and
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. Employees at companies have to follow strict and rigid systems.
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 could be the drive toward the idea of the own business.
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 them with
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flexibility and the autonomous, when
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individuals have the full liberation to administer their
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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