The diagram shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comarisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comarisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates the stages of
sugar
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crystals
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production as a final product from
sugar
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canes
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.
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man-made process contains 7 different stages.
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linear diagram starts with the cultivation of
sugar
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canes
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in
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farms and ends with cooling and drying
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. In the first step,
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canes
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should be planted in the agricultural fields and after about 1 year or 1 year and half these plants will be ripe enough to be harvested. The harvest of these crops can be done by two dissimilar methods, manual by farmers or automatically by utilization of modern agricultural machines respectively. In the subsequent stage,
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canes
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must be crushed and their juice has been extracted. After that, the extracted juice is passed through a limestone filter and during the next stage that it takes place in Evaporator by use of
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the juice will be converted to a kind of syrup.
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sugar
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crystals will be separated from syrup by using centrifugal force.
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, the final products,
sugar
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crystals, will be dried and cooled down.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, canes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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