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some people think that punishment is the best way of teaching children to behave well. Others believe that it is better to reward children for good behaviour. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The most impactful
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 in the lives of people are childhood, it is in these
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 that one forms impressions and the experiences shape the nature and behaviour of the
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. Some people believe that a
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 must be punished for a wrongdoing
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 others believe that one must shape an individual through
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.
Rewards
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 and recognition are the positive pillars to motivate a person. When a
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 gets a reward for speaking well or discipline or cleanliness, it motivates him or her to do it more. Even more, the
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 gets to know the importance of the good things he or she is doing in life. Even more, complementing children for their excellence boosts their self-esteem and helps them become better individuals.
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, punishments have their own impact on the lives of an individual. Children refrain from doing an activity for fear of receiving punishment.
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, if a
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 was abstained from having chocolate because of a mistake he or she did, there will be a realisation of why things are not right. Punishing must not mean physical or mental torture, if done with care it brings in the realisation more than fear. In conclusion, growing
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 are formative
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 of a
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's life and both
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 and punishment are necessary. In my opinion, a
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 must get both but what is more important is the realisation of things from
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 and recognition.
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