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Some people believe that residents are responsible for the place where they live to be clean and tidy. Others believe that the government is responsible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It has long been a subject of argument whether local people are responsible to clean their surroundings or the
government
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 should take
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 action. There are strong arguments on both sides of the debate, which I will discuss here. The most telling argument in favour of places being clean lies in the fact that
government
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 should take
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 responsibility in a way to decide a budget which will receive from local residents. Not only, but
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 should
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 develop a proper department that totally handles issues regarding cleaning and tides. But the
government
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 might
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 decide how much annual budget should be spent on maintenance. An example of
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 scenario can be seen in the united arab emirates state is responsible to take care of their public residential places by charging monthly a fixed amount. Notwithstanding the aforementioned argument,
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 cleaning responsibility is not without its concern. The primary one stems from the fact that if people can not take some responsibility they will face privacy interruption.
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, every local person has their own skills which they can show to decorate their own home. For ,instance some people love art
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 as bright colour painting on their walls or some go for simple light colours. It hardly needs to mention that the advantages of
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 cannot be overlooked at all against the benefits the state offers. In conclusion, I would not wish to underestimate the benefits of cleaning your personal space to your own.
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, I feel that the role of
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 in providing
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 services on a low budget is instrumental indeed.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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