In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In a number of nations , some individuals feel it is significant to spend large
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on building new
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networks for extremely fast
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between
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Others think the
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should be spent on enhancing existing public
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. In my opinion, the
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should spend on
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networks because
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connect
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and it environmentally friendly. On the one hand, some think the government should spend
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on improving existing public
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existing public
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a new
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a new railway line
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railway
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lines.
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the existing public
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can encourage
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to
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it rather than
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their private cars.
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, the government can make more improvements in order to make existing public
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namely, buses, subway less crowded and faster, which
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can motivate
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to
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it.
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step can reduce the number of vehicles on our roads, which means less traffic congestion.
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those
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who believe the authorities should spend
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money
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in order to construct
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new railway lines
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railway
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lines.
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a new fast
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a new fast train
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trains
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can
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connect
cities
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can lead
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the
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commuting time for
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is because fast
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are faster,which
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people
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can arrive
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their destinations
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less time.
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fast
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are more eco-friendly. To illustrate,
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fast
trains
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use
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fuel in
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way than public
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, which
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less Co2 footprint.
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,fast
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can contribute to
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the
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global warming and climate change
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of
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less Co2 emissions.
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my perspective, it is important to spend large sums of
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on constructing new
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lines for very fast
trains
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between
cities
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because it can minimize travelling time for
people
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as well as
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eco-friendly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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