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Some people think that the government should establish free libraries in each town. Others, however, believe that it is a waste of money since the public can use the Internet at home to obtain information. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Some think that government should create
libraries
 free of cost in every town,
while
 others would argue that it is a wasteful expenditure since the public can use the Internet for obtaining information at home.
Although
 the internet is a vast source of knowledge compared to
libraries
, I believe that opening free
libraries
 would help lower-class
people
 in their education. Online sources have much more material to
study
 than a
library
.
In other words
, there is no limit to storage capacity on the net,
therefore
, a person can search for any book from all around the globe.
For instance
, onlinereader.com has almost all books in one place where
people
 can read whatever they want.
However
, many underprivileged
people
 do not have access to the Internet
thus
 they need a physical place to
study
.
On the other hand
, free
libraries
 by the government would help individuals in poverty to
study
.
That is
 to say, they would be able to read multiple books free of cost which
otherwise
 they could not afford.
For example
, in Bihar, there is at least one free
library
 in every city,
as a result
, more than half of the civil service officers in India belong to Bihar.
Therefore
, I opine that opening free public
libraries
 is a blessing to the underprivileged to do something in their lives. In conclusion, some think that opening a free
library
 would be a better idea
while
 others believe that
people
 can
study
 through online sources.
Although
 all books are available online, I opine that opening a physical
library
 would help poor
people
 to
study
 free of cost.
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