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Some people think environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, the rise in
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environmental pollution is increasing drastically. In order to protect nature one should take
few
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a few
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 steps to conserve
environment
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the environment
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 as
this
 is not the duty of politicians alone. I totally disagree with that because individuals
also
 have to make their hands dirty to guard and keep
environment
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the environment
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 clean, even if they can do a little.
Firstly
,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 has provided many measures to protect mother nature
as
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from
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plunge
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a plunge
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in
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into
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the
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pollution. Politicians are
following
this
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these
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 measures to keep the
surrounding
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surroundings
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 clean via
survey
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surveys
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 or
advertisment
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advertisements
.
For example
, in historical
places
 or tourist
places
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,places
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policitians
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politicians
 always come to visit and took
necessay
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necessary
 actions to make that
places
 righteous for the people so that they can feel
warth
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warmth
worthy
 and good
it
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if
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 they visit that place in future.
Secondaly
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Secondly
, a single person can
also
 make the change. As to keep the
surrounding
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surroundings
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neet
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neat
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 and clean, one is not supposed to look for
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a politician
the politician
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politician
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politicians
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, he/she may take the responsibility to make it clean. As
these person
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this person
these people
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 only litter the
places
. One should be aware of throwing the waste in the dustbins only. For
an
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instance, people throw plastics and edible items wherever they
vist
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visit
, so if they stop doing that automatically they are protecting
environment
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the environment
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, not
in
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on
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 a big scale but in
small
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a small
the small
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step
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steps
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 which is remarkable. In conclusion, to protect
environment
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the environment
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 individuals have to think,
what
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about what
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 steps they can do to make
easy
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it easy
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 for
politicans
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politicians
 so that they can sustain a better
environment
 for
coming
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the coming
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 generation in
easy
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an easy
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 and fast way.
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