Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is
a
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common sense for developed
countries
to provide financial support to poorer
countries
.
Although
this
kind of supply is
benefical
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beneficial
in some specific cases,
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agree that developed
countries
should give other types of help rather than financial aid. On the one hand, being provided a
considerble
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considerable
amount of budget is very beneficial. First of all, many
countries
are suffering
crisis
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.
This
means that some of them might not have the ability to provide the
soicety
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society
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an
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enough amount of financial support.
In addition
to
this
, in some developing
countries
, they have enough tools and infrastructures to be able to function.
However
,
due to
some financial crisis or in need
for
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a huge investment, giving
money
to
countries
that are suffering
indeed
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a huge support.
On the other hand
, there are other things rather than
money
that can help a poor country solve poverty more
efficently
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efficiently
. In the first place, lack of
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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or tools is the main cause of the problem rather than
money
. Pouring huge
amount
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of
money
into
countries
, which they can't fully make use of,
it
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causes a huge waste that can
be use
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more
sufficently
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sufficiently
efficiently
. Another point worth mentioning is that giving
the
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copyrights, buildings or subjects is a better way to help
the
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poor
countries
.
By giving
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food, healthcare, educational system or merriment,
this
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can benefit the resident more quickly and
efficently
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efficiently
and by any chance,
creating
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a better relationship between the
countries
.
To sum up
, giving financial aid to the poorer
countries
is
benefical
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beneficial
,
however
, there are more things to provide rather than
money
to the poor
countries
that are more realistic and helpful.
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  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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