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The maps compare an Island before and after the developments carried out for tourism targets.

The maps compare an Island before and after the developments carried out for tourism targets.
The maps compare an
Island
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 before and after the developments carried out for tourism targets.
Overall
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, many new facilities have been constructed for tourists, including accommodation, restaurant, reception, swimming,
pier
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and pier
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 and those had been built without damaging nature or
cut
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cutting
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 palm trees. Before, the facilities were constructed an
Island
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 was almost empty with just trees which were in the northern and southern parts .There
were
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was
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sea
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a sea
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 surrounding an
Island
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 and
small
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a small
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 part of
beach
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the beach
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 without any facilities. After, in the central part of the
Island
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, built restaurant and reception
which
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apply
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are between two separate accommodation areas .
In
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On
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 the southern side were 6 hotel houses which surrounding trees
such
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 as
circle
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a circle
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 ,
whereas
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,
in
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on
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 the northern were 9 hotels .The constructor facilitated
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a
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small footpath to easily walk through cottages and
beach
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beaches
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.In the southern part, a pier was constructed
to
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for
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 boats for landing and it ended with the vehicle track ,leading to
restaurant
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the restaurant
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 and reception.
Also
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 has activities in the
southern
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south
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like swimming
in
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on
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 the beach
while
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 in the northern has open space which remained unchanged.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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