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The maps compare an Island before and after the developments carried out for tourism targets.

The maps compare an Island before and after the developments carried out for tourism targets.
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The maps compare an
Island
 before and after the developments carried out for tourism targets.
Overall
, many new facilities have been constructed for tourists, including accommodation, restaurant, reception, swimming,
pier
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and pier
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 and those had been built without damaging nature or
cut
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cutting
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 palm trees. Before, the facilities were constructed an
Island
 was almost empty with just trees which were in the northern and southern parts .There
were
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was
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sea
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a sea
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 surrounding an
Island
 and
small
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a small
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 part of
beach
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the beach
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 without any facilities. After, in the central part of the
Island
, built restaurant and reception
which
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apply
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are between two separate accommodation areas .
In
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On
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 the southern side were 6 hotel houses which surrounding trees
such
 as
circle
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a circle
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 ,
whereas
,
in
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on
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 the northern were 9 hotels .The constructor facilitated
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a
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small footpath to easily walk through cottages and
beach
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beaches
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.In the southern part, a pier was constructed
to
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for
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 boats for landing and it ended with the vehicle track ,leading to
restaurant
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the restaurant
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 and reception.
Also
 has activities in the
southern
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south
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like swimming
in
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on
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 the beach
while
 in the northern has open space which remained unchanged.
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