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The table illustrate how much projects are costing in American dollars for West Africa, Central America and South east Asia to sustainable forestry for over the next five years

The table illustrate how much projects are costing in American dollars for West Africa, Central America and South east Asia to sustainable forestry for over the next five years
#projects #american #dollars #west #africa #america #asia #forestry #five #years
The table
illustrate
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 how much projects are costing in American
dollars
 for West Africa, Central America and
South east
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Southeast
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Asia
to
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for
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 sustainable forestry
for
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apply
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over the next five years.
Meanwhile
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 the pie chart
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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 anticipated expenditure breakdown allocation for the first
year
.
Overall
,
South east
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Southeast
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Asia
 has the highest
predict
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cost
between
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among
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three
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the three
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 projects ,
whereas
, salary is
biggest
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the biggest
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 expense in comparison with other sections . In the first
year
 ,the estimated
cost
 in West Africa was 10.5
million
dollars
 a little more than
a
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half of Central America and approximately
one third
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one-third
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 of the
Asia
 project .There is forecasted that Africa will spend less money
at
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in
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 the
last
year
 nearly two times less, about 3.5
million
dollars
.
Also
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 Central America shows
same
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the same
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 pattern .In comparison with
first
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the first
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year
 which was 20
million
 and
at
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in
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 the
last
year
is
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rated
5
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at 5
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million
dollars
that
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the
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 expected
cost
 is far fewer roughly four times less.
However
, surprisingly
South east
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Southeast
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Asia
 expose
highest
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the highest
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 result just around 50
million
dollars
.
According to
 the pie chart ,
the
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 salary takes exactly
a
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half of
expenditure
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the expenditure
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 and just under one third is spent to set up
cost
 ,
while
, training and office expenses is equal
a
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tiny majority ,exactly 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, asia, year, cost, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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