A friend is planning to visit the town where you live. Write a letter to make some suggestions about The best time to visit your town The most interesting places to check out Where to find inexpensive accommodation

Dear Maninder, I hope
this
letter finds you in the best of spirits and radiant health. Yesterday, I got your letter and I am thrilled and excited to know that you are planning a visit to Manali.
Therefore
, I am writing
this
letter to give you a few suggestions about the trip.
Firstly
, it would be great if you
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plan your visit
in
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the month of December
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because
then
you would be able to witness fresh snowfall, which is one of the main attractions for
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visitors and you can see scenic beauty at its best.
Secondly
, there are a number of places to visit.
First,
the Atal Tunnel
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is the most visited tourist attraction.
Second,
the Solang Valley
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is famous for its winter sports activities.
Lastly
, the heritage market in Old Manali
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is the perfect place to buy things like woollen garments, dry fruit etc.
Thirdly
, in order to, get a low budget place to stay you can consider Old Manali, because here you can easily book a travel hostel and shared
accomodations
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accommodation
.
This
will
definately
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help you to plan a
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trip. I hope
this
information is helpful to you and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours lovingly, Jatinder.
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coherence cohesion
Although the letter is very well-structured overall, providing a little more specific detail about the accommodation options, such as names or examples, could enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Excellent greeting and closing that add a personal touch to the letter.
task achievement
Your response includes all the requested information and a bit more, which is wonderful for achieving the task effectively.
task achievement
The writing tone remains friendly and courteous throughout, fitting perfectly for a letter to a friend.

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