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Now people are beginning to realize that financial support to poor states form richer countries are not effective in way to solve poverty.

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Now people are beginning to realize that financial support to poor
states
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form
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from
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 richer
countries
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are
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is
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 not effective in
way
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a way
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 to solve poverty. Personally, I tend to think that developed
states
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 should give other types of help to
the
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poorer
countries
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 rather than
money
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.
Firts
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First
 and foremost, it is well known that education is now worth
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 than anything. What I mean here is that developed
countries
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 have to help
for
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poorer ones in
education
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the education
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 sphere. A good case in point is
International
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the International
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educating
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 system known as
"Cambridge
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the "Cambridge
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 system" created by
UK
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the UK
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.
This
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 project can positively affect in school systems of
countries
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 over the world, which
lead
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leads
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 to growing of smart generation. With the intellectual
youngs
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young
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 impoverished
states
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 can
impove
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improve
 their
economical
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 status easily.
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, financial aid from
whealth
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wealthy
wealth
countries
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 can be used
unsuccessfull
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successfully
unsuccessful
. One of the main
reason
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 behind
that is
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 the situation in history when
government
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the government
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 of poor
countries
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 uses
money
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 given to economic
cause
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causes
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 to
dangerous
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 for humanity purposes. Take
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for
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,for
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 example, North Korea
which
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government
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is
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made nuclear bombs and other weapons with the
money
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 from
Soviet
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the Soviet
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 Union.
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, before receiving
the
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financial support
by
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from
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 developed
countries
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 government of
state
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a state
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which
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taking aid have to represent
the
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an
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 action plan
to
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 spending
this
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money
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. In conclusion, taking
everithing
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everything
 mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that helping only with
money
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 is
hazardenous
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hazardous
 to both sides. If
wealth
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wealthy
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states
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are not take
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 action about it and would not create effective supporting systems
to
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for
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 developing
countries
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, the perspectives of poverty will remarkably increase.

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