The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and town who born in Australia or outside of state between 1995 and 2010.

The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and town who born in Australia or outside of state between 1995 and 2010.
The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and
town
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towns
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who
born
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in
Australia
or outside of
state
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between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, in both years the
increasing
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of
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population
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the population
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is considerably higher in cities. In town and rural
areas
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It is apparently seen that in 2010 borning is
decrased
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decreased
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. It is worth noticing that in 1995 citizens of towns who
born
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were born
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in
Australia
is more for approximately two times
than
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who
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those who
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born
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were born
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outside of the country. In
the
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comparison
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people
borned
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born
burned
in urban and rural
areas
of
Australia
are less than
outside
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those outside
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of it
for
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by
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about 20
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each. It is conspicuous that in 2005
peple
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people
who burned in towns and rural
areas
of
Australia
are have equal
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20
percent
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per cent
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,
while
in cities it is still less than
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those who
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borned
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born
outside of
state
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the state
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for
same
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the same
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numbers.
However
, people
borned
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born
in villages and other rural
areas
which
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located
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are located
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outside of
Australia
are less
from
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than
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who
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those
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borned
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born
in
Australia
for approximately 10 and 15
percent
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per cent
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respectively.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, areas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "represents" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographics
  • Migration patterns
  • Population distribution
  • Rural
  • Urban
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Growth rate
  • Settlement patterns
  • Residential categories
  • Urbanization
  • Infrastructure
  • Economic opportunities
  • Lifestyle preferences
  • Residential mobility
  • Urban planning
  • Governmental policies
  • Community impact
  • Data analysis
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